In Te Ngahere we have to write a description about Te Ngahere.
We had pictures and we could look at them and get some ideas off them.
The thing I need to do better is add more detail to my writing What I did well was the writing
A bright green bush and the blue sky like nothing else. The moss like it belongs there.
The plants fresh like the sky.
The plants fresh like the sky.
A kiwi sprinting like it was getting chased by something. An owl screeching for its babies.
The bamboo brown forest was a leafy paradise. Trees are the castles of wood.
The teak-brown forest was a woody heaven. Every step a cracking sound under your feet.
Kia Ora Vinnie,
ReplyDeleteIt’s Boombe. I really like your descriptive writing about Te Ngahere. It is really descriptive and you make it sound like you are there right now. I like how you added words like teak-brown and woody heaven, it gives it a lot more effect!!! Next time I think you should work on adding bit more detail and extending your paragraphs :)
Keep up the awesome work!
Boombe